Tuesday, October 28, 2008

excerpt from 'Living It Up'

TUESDAY, DECEMBER 4
John Marchbanks was ten minutes late meeting Polly and Lainie for lunch to discuss making Sophie’s Place a business partnership. Polly spent the time convincing Lainie what a brilliant attorney he was. He rushed in, out of breath, and made no excuses. He kissed Polly’s cheek and she introduced Lainie. John smiled engagingly. He was blond, blue eyed, and had a deep dimple in his left cheek. His dark blue suit with a subtle plaid was exquisitely tailored, and his tie was silk. Lainie caught on to his sense of humor right away and enjoyed the conversation. As they ate, she noticed, too, that he was left handed.

After the meal, John ordered a piece of apple pie, and when the server went away, he asked, “Why do you want to do this? Why do you want to complicate your lives with owning and operating a business?”

“Didn’t Winston tell you about the great Single Adult party we organized?” Polly asked.

“Yes, and it sounded fun,” he admitted. “Almost made me wish I’d broken my own rule and come to it.”

“What’s your rule?” Lainie scowled.

“I don’t get involved in dating services,” he said condescendingly.

“I don’t want to hear this,” Polly groaned, leaning her head in one hand.

“What do you mean, dating services?” Lainie demanded.

“Isn’t that what Single Adults is all about? Matching people up?”

Lainie stared at him in disbelief.

“Forgive me, John,” Polly interrupted reassuringly, “but I’m only saying this because you’re an idiot – you’re a colossal idiot.”

Just then the server put John’s pie in front of him, and he frowned as he picked up the fork.

Lainie calmed herself while Polly was talking, then answered John’s question. “No, it isn’t a dating service. You should have done your homework.”

“I stand corrected,” he shrugged. “Now I’ve got two sassy dames on my case.”

“I’m not sassy,” Lainie retorted. “You have no reason to call me sassy.”

John frowned at Polly as he started on the pie. “Looks like I got her Irish up.”

“Our point is,” Polly said, “if you had come to the party, you would have seen what a spectacular, fabulous bash we put together. That’s not bragging. I’m only stating the facts.”

“We developed a great working relationship,” Lainie added, “and it was so much fun, we didn’t want to stop.”

John looked at each of them, bewildered. “You’re really determined to do this.”

“We’re not wasting your time here, John,” Polly said.

He laughed. “You didn’t think this wasn’t a billable hour, did you?”

“Did you think this was the only billable hour you were going to spend with us?” Polly retorted.

“We have the funding,” Lainie added. “It’s all here in the prospectus I put together.” John’s eyebrows went up. He took the portfolio Lainie handed him and stared at her. She sat back in her chair with a “so there” look on her face. “I told you. I have a strong business background.”

“Aunt Sophie’s selling her house for a very reasonable price,” Polly said. “Her daughters knocked off a considerable chunk just to thank me for being there when Sophie got sick.”

John was still astonished. “So this isn’t just some Relief Society whim.”

Polly leaned toward him and said, “John, it’s going to be hard to finish that pie with both feet in your mouth.”

Lainie put her hands on the table, restraining herself from springing across it and choking him. She spoke slowly and deliberately as if he were six years old. “Just put my name on the papers, Mr. Marchbanks, and I’ll sign them. Or would you rather we find another attorney?”

John smiled his most charming smile, the dimple deepening as his eyes flashed. He took a sip from his water glass. “Okay,” he said, “now I’m sure you’re serious. I have to be certain. As your legal advisor, I don’t want you getting involved in something that could overwhelm you. Do you understand what I’m saying? The puppy may be cute and cuddly, but it has to be fed, and it might grow up to be a Saint Bernard. Are you ready for that?”

“Wouldn’t that mean we’re successful?” Polly asked. “What’s wrong with that?”

“Surely you’ve been listening to what we’ve been saying for the last fifteen minutes,” Lainie said. “This isn’t a difficult concept.”

“John, we’re not doing this on a capricious impulse,” Polly added. “There’s a passage of scripture that describes perfectly what we want to do at Sophie’s Place. I called Lainie right away when I read it and we decided this is our mission statement. The earth was created for the use of mankind, and all the beautiful and pleasant things were put here to please the eye and gladden the heart.”

Lainie watched his eyes as he listened to Polly. He focused completely on her. His were the kind of eyes a person wouldn’t be afraid to wander around in for a while. Lainie waited for an opening. “That’s what people want when they celebrate important moments in their lives,” she said, holding his eyes now with hers, “and we have the creativity and imagination and business sense, and a fabulous place, to make it all happen.”

“John, we’ve explored every possible scenario,” Polly said. “Lainie and I are both at a place in our lives where we can settle into the thing we love and go on doing it till we’re too feeble to walk in the front door.”

Lainie leaned forward on the table, smiling, focused on him. “John, don’t you love the law? Isn’t that why you spent three years devoted to learning it in law school? Doesn’t it satisfy your passion? What are we here for if not to make life better for somebody else?”

Startled by her insight, he caught his breath. It was as if she had opened his heart and mind and read verbatim. “Yes,” he said, putting down his fork, “I do love it that much.”

“Then you understand,” Lainie smiled.

He held her gaze across the table. This woman was dazzling. “I have a question for you.”

Leaning a little further forward, she asked, “What’s that?”

John leaned toward Lainie. “What’s your legal name?”

“Now we’re getting somewhere,” Polly said.

“Elaine Thomas McGuire.”

“Thomas?” Polly repeated.

“My parents thought I was going to be a boy,” Lainie explained, “and I was born on my grandfather’s birthday, so they named me after him anyway because he was a redhead, too. My dad calls me Tommy sometimes. But it’s okay. My grandmother’s name was Elaine.”

John chuckled. “That’s really something.”

“It’s not as interesting as some other Southern Utah names I could mention. I grew up with twin girls named Relvadeen and Revaleen.”

“That’s a good one,” he said. “I once had a client named Chance Daykin.” Lainie and Polly laughed. “He was a stockbroker. True story,” he said, taking another bite of pie.

“Are you two going to spend the afternoon one-upping each other,” Polly asked, “or are we going on to the next step?”

He put his fork down, pushed the plate away and wiped his mouth with a napkin. “I couldn’t have known it until we talked, but this prospectus might alter the partnership agreement in some way, and I want to read it before we finalize things. If necessary I’ll amend what might need to be amended.” He took a drink of water.

“Another billable hour?”

He grinned at Polly. “Not only are you sassy, you’re also relentless.”

“I’m in business now,” she said. “I have to be. It’s called protecting your interests.”

He reached over and put his hand on hers. “Are you interested in telling Winston about this, or do you want me to?”

“No. I’ll tell him myself. He doesn't know it yet, but we're having dinner tomorrow night.”

He raised his eyebrows. “That’s promising.”

“First things first,” she said. “I’ll tell him he can read the prospectus.”

“I’ll send a review copy of the partnership agreement by courier tomorrow afternoon,” he said. “Call me by noon Thursday if you’re unhappy with anything in the document. Then Friday, you can sign the papers when we look at the house together with the real estate agent.”

“I’ll call him and arrange to meet at three,” Polly said, looking at John and Lainie. Both nodded. “Well, I’ll see you then.”

(This excerpt is the property of the author and may not be copied or otherwise published.)

Friday, October 24, 2008

Does This Sound 'Finished' to You?

Chiaroscuro

Like cataracts on ancient eyes,
a window opaque with mineral salts
prevents my clear vision of the world.
Can I say of my soul
I don't do windows?

Wednesday, October 22, 2008

background of 'Living It Up'

Lainie McGuire and John Marchbanks are minor characters in Living It Down, and meet briefly at the end. Now, in Living It Up, which takes place in 1991, Lainie is ready for a change in direction, with Polly Burke as her business partner at Sophie's Place, Polly's aunt's beautiful old home. Lainie and John, Winston’s law partner, meet when he draws up incorporation papers for the business. John and Lainie are two never-marrieds approaching 40, and are both at peace, madly active in the church, happy with their single lives. When they fall in love, their worlds are turned upside down. He’s an LDS convert of 20 years, oldest son in a big Catholic family, and his parents still don’t approve of his conversion. In many ways, John and Lainie are opposites. He’s a talented artist, acts in community theater, plays the piano, teaches Primary and has a small beach house on the Oregon Coast. He’s devoted to his law practice. She’s from Cedar City, Utah, a dedicated people person, works with the Single Adults in her ward, and does a lot of volunteer work in the community. John lives in a Quail Valley condo on the east bench of Provo, and Lainie lives in a house on the west side near Utah Lake. She is a breast cancer survivor who appreciates every day, even a bad one. John and Lainie are compatible, have a mutual attraction, and just as John is ready to acknowledge that he loves Lainie, he is diagnosed with malignant melanoma, and the world is upside down again. What they learn about themselves and each other through his treatment and recovery, given their cancer statistics, helps them work out the necessary compromises for a future together. Ultimately, it’s all about life. In this book, we also find out what happened to Polly and Winston after they reconciled, and we follow through with the teenagers. There's another parallel/contrasting subplot with Angela and Kyle that has been WAAAY fun to write. These two people really burst into life, and if I ever write another book in this series, it would be about them. But I'm not planning on it right now.

Wednesday, October 15, 2008

an excerpt from 'Living It Down'

In the second novel in my trilogy, Living It Up, the main idea is that life can be so rich and sweet and wonderful, and there's no sense putting it off until a more convenient time. Lainie McGuire and John Marchbanks are minor characters in Living It Down, and meet briefly at the end. Now, in Living It Up, which takes place in 1991, Lainie is ready for a change in direction, with Polly Burke as her business partner at Sophie's Place, Polly's aunt's beautiful old home. Lainie and John, Winston’s law partner, meet when he draws up incorporation papers for the business. John and Lainie are two never-marrieds approaching 40, and are both at peace, madly active in the church, happy with their single lives. When they fall in love, their worlds are turned upside down. He’s an LDS convert of 20 years, oldest son in a big Catholic family, and his parents still don’t approve of his conversion. In many ways, John and Lainie are opposites. He’s a talented artist, acts in community theater, plays the piano, teaches Primary and has a small beach house on the Oregon Coast. He’s devoted to his law practice. She’s from Cedar City, Utah, a dedicated people person, works with the Single Adults in her ward, and does a lot of volunteer work in the community. John lives in a Quail Valley condo on the east bench of Provo, and Lainie lives in a house on the west side near Utah Lake. She is a breast cancer survivor who appreciates every day, even a bad one. John and Lainie are compatible, have a mutual attraction, and just as John is ready to acknowledge that he loves Lainie, he is diagnosed with malignant melanoma, and the world is upside down again. What they learn about themselves and each other through his treatment and recovery, given their cancer statistics, helps them work out the necessary compromises for a future together. Ultimately, it’s all about life. There are some other subplots, too, that contrast and parallel the John/Lainie story. We find out what happened to Polly and Winston after they reconciled, and follow through with the teenagers.

Monday, October 13, 2008

An Out-of-Mind Experience

Since retiring this spring and submitting novels to a publisher I've learned a lot about myself and my limitations emotionally and intellectually. If you like action novels you'll have to go somewhere else because mine are about people and relationships and the action mostly takes place inside the characters' hearts and minds. I decided early on that I respect my readers' intelligence enough not to talk down to them. Reading my books will be an emotional AND cerebral experience.

Writing a novel is almost an out-of-mind experience in the sense that there are these extra people inhabiting my mind and telling me their stories, and I'm at the keyboard taking dictation. They exist independently, and I know them rather well, but I've never met any actual person like them. I don't even know that we have enough in common to be compatible dinner companions, but I like and admire them; they're far more interesting than I am. Once they come alive in my imagination, they start telling me their backstories. Character is plot, and every character has a history, so I don't worry much about elaborate plotting; I just let them do what they will, and a story unfolds.

In the first novel, 'Living It Down,' which takes place in 1990-91, the premise is based on this question: What would an LDS woman do if she went to counsel with a priesthood leader in her new ward and discovered that he was the reason she needed to talk to a priesthood leader in the first place? You know how ideas trigger other ideas and pretty soon you're a million miles away from where you started. That's how I got to that question, but I didn't have an answer for it, and it intrigued me. In this case, the two people involved were college students together twenty years ago and he wasn't LDS. When she, Polly Hamilton, broke up with Todd Kendall, he quit school, joined the Navy, and met an LDS chaplain. Now, 20 years later, things still bother Polly, now Mrs. Winston Burke, and so she takes a time out from her marriage to reevaluate her life. She's in her late 30's now, unhappy, and can't name the reasons why. Winston is devastated but gives her the space she needs because he is completely devoted to his wife. She moves with her two teenage daughters from her big beautiful Orem, Utah home to the student housing basement apartment in her Aunt Sophie's elegant Victorian home in Provo. Polly's first meeting with the bishop, when she learns his identity, is a disaster, but he persists and convinces her that he's the only person who can help her through this; his hope is that in the process, she will also finally forgive him. He's a completely different man now, changed by his conversion, a humble man with genuine Christian love. His goal is to help her heal so she can return to her husband.

A very important issue for LDS women comes up with the premise question - trust. You have to trust your husband enough to marry him and allow him to be the father of your children and help raise them and support you, and you have to trust your priesthood leaders enough to confide in them and depend on their leadership. There is a sub-plot involving Polly's teenage daughter who is rushed by a predatory boy. Girls have to learn who they can trust, too, and dating is the process by which people reveal the level of trust others can have in them.

This is a contemporary LDS story in which there are several kinds of love portrayed. Issues of trust and loyalty come up frequently for these characters. I vetted the teenage subplot with some teenagers I know, and they corrected some things, but assured me that there really are predatory boys out there, in growing numbers with devastating consequences, and girls really do talk like this, only worse. My how times have changed.

Sophie's malapropisms are one of the threads of wit and humor in the book. (…he's got bad arthuritis, walks with a lymph…) A malapropism is confusing two similar words with hilarious results. Sophie says, for instance that a real escape agent contacted her about selling her house, and in another place she tells Polly she's glad she found her glitch in life. I'll post a scene with Sophie so you can get in on the fun.


Wednesday, October 1, 2008

Welcome to my diablog

Yes, I'm good at making up new words. Diablog is a written conversation on my new blog. Let's have one. I'll start.

You've got to wonder what kind of day it's going to be when you wake up from a dream where your friend who's divorced is having a civilized conversation with her ex, and 'Buffalo gals won't you come out tonight, come out tonight, come out tonight, Buffalo gals won't you come out tonight and dance by the light of the moon' is running through your brain. It makes you want to run screaming out of the left side of your head. But I calmed myself and went on with my day. So far so good.

Today I'm going to proofread some pages of a document my son Jordan sent me from Diamond Ranch Academy where he works, and then I'm going to type up the school newsletter for my husband Roger who is in his LAST year of teaching middle school. I was the writing tutor there for the last seven years, but I figured that's a lucky number so I quit this spring to pursue writing and publishing. I just submitted three manuscripts to a publisher, and while I'm waiting for their response, I'll keep busy with stuff like this, as a reasonable alternative to climbing the walls.

I can easily email my manuscripts if any of you would like to read them. I'd love to get your feedback. In fact, I'm looking for salient quotes to put on the cover, so this could be your lucky break.